There he stood, alone, outcast and abash, stinking from
blood and rotten flesh of his brothers.
And yet all he could ever muster was pity for their
apathetic souls, one that did not care for freedom or justice, accustomed to torment.
They choose to close their door rather than embrace the uprising,
But that did not cause him agony, it was the walls
surrounding them that kept him awake, so strong that even death of their own
kin could not crack it.
He was being crucified, so as to set an example for others
.They took amusement thinking they had sought an end fitting for a legend.
He had no care to beg for mercy or feel sorrow for his end.
In his final hour, he prayed that someday they would wake up
, look outside the window and get the courage to break free from their chains , rise and
fight for their prerogative ,one which
was practiced so freely by others .
And he would watch from heavens cheering them, and in the
aftermath will welcome them in his arms.
For now, he took solace in the fact that he was dying a free
man.
This is terribly sad. That last line, "For now, he took solace in the fact that he was dying a free man." is powerful. At least he was able to find comfort in something.
ReplyDeleteThanks Janna :)
DeleteHmmmm -- You've done a great job describing a zealot. All that passion gone not to live to fight another battle.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ann ,glad you like it .
DeleteJesus?
ReplyDeleteNot really , i have always thought of Jesus as a very kind and forgiving individual , i took inspiration for this from uprising in Rome led by gladiators , they were eventually captured and many of them were crucified to set an example ,
Deletei feel that many of them must have seen it coming but had refused to back down .
Thanks for reading :)
This is interesting. It's good that he has some small happiness in death.
ReplyDeleteThanks Draug :)
DeleteGood sketch of someone who has his eyes on another prize.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kymm :)
DeleteThe end sent chills through my bones
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading Bjorn :)
DeleteThe whole first sentence made me sit up straight. This, I said to myself, is something worth reading. I love the writing.
ReplyDeleteI liked this.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteFreedom is priceless & to gain it even at the cost of death requires great courage & conviction.Liked the way you described the situation he found himself in -a portrait of a true warrior:-)
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading Atreyee :)
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